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PostPosted: Fri Aug 24, 2018 8:47 pm 
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A few dozen scenes from several interconnecting storylines have been swirling in my head, and it's probably time to set them free. No guarantees that they'll come in chronological order, that they'll have titles, that they'll add up to a full story, that the main characters will ever meet each other, or even that I'll keep posting on any sort of reasonable schedule, but if I can get at least one out per month I'll be happy. Who knows, I might even edit several together into a real submission.


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PostPosted: Fri Aug 24, 2018 8:48 pm 
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PostPosted: Fri Aug 24, 2018 11:12 pm 
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Neat. I look forward to seeing how this all comes together (if, indeed, it does!) I like these sorts of story-driven world builds, so it will be pretty cool to see how this world shapes itself.

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PostPosted: Wed Sep 12, 2018 2:07 pm 
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I regret that it's taken forever for me to comment on this, Brentain, but I read it, and I love it! Thank you so much for sharing!

I'll basically echo all of Raven's comments, for starters. There's an almost palpable sense of weariness at the beginning -- that feeling of being too tired, of the weight of time and memory just being too much, really comes through. I also love the little detail about searching for flavor, and being reminded of home. Similarly, I love the contrast at the end, between the innocuous, fragile beauty of a small, simple thing, and the greater ruin it portends.

Really, really great stuff! I look forward to more!

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PostPosted: Thu Sep 13, 2018 1:06 pm 
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There's an almost palpable sense of weariness at the beginning -- that feeling of being too tired, of the weight of time and memory just being too much, really comes through.

That wasn't really intentional, but I'm glad it works. I was probably channeling my own great grandmother a bit there.

I also love the little detail about searching for flavor, and being reminded of home.

Something about the way you phrase that reminds me of Uprooted. Probably not a theme in my writing, but who knows?

Similarly, I love the contrast at the end, between the innocuous, fragile beauty of a small, simple thing, and the greater ruin it portends.

Speaking of which, I found this on a different page of my notebook:

Butterfly of Starvation
Creature — Insect
Flying
Echo
When this creature's echo cost is paid, target player sacrifices a creature.
1/1


Really, really great stuff! I look forward to more!

Thank you! And... soon, I swear. :paranoid:


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